Monday, July 19, 2010

Here's the beginning to a story I began a few years ago... I would love your input.

Life's A Marathon

Paragraph 1 (always start small)

When he broke up with me, I acquired vast amounts of time to my days. In a fleeting moment of empowerment, the decision was made to run a half-marathon; the moment lasted long enough for me to pay for the Cowtown marathon and drag my friend Liz into it as well. Her common sense, or repressing nature, talked me out of signing up for the full-fledged marathon, in which I may have dropped dead somewhere near the conclusion of the 26 miles. I signed her up as well. How’s that for common sense, sucker. Training began the following day.

1 comment:

Same Sweet Girl: Memoir of a Southern Belle said...

I love your writing style!!! The only tiny issue I have with the paragraph is where you say you dragged Liz into it and then later you say you signed her up as well. It feels like you're saying the same thing twice. I can't really think of how I would fix it though...I really like the last part but if you took out the first part you would need something else to say with the "pay for the Cowtown marathon and". Just my opinion of course. I'm not a professional. LOL

This sounds like it's going to be a great story!! Have you written anymore?